Post 10c - feedback from the script

Below is the feedback given upon Dudi Appleton reading our original script and him telling us what could be improved upon. After reading the feeback we were told that we also have the opportunity to Skype Dudi as he was willing to explain his feedback face-to-face online with each of the groups. I was curious as to what Dudi had to say, I wanted to know several of the points in more detail. 

Post 10 - Treatment

In the previous post there is a mind map showing the key elements coming from our chosen logline, after we chose this logline we looked to see how it could develop further. By this I mean that we had to put our ideas together and come up with the treatment for our film. Here is what we arrived at.

"Run" Treatment

Gadebridge Park. Late evening. We open to see a large amount of zombies running franticly across the empty field, Drenched in blood with their organs protruding out of there decomposing bodies. Terrified, a group of 18 year olds run across the field screaming and fighting of the infected as they run. A girl Charlie becomes the focus of our attention as she uses brutally hits an infected zombie in the face with a bashed up baseball bat.

A guy falls to the ground, "Jacob" Charlie screeches as she sprints over to the boy lying on the ground as a group of the infected surround him. Charlie charges through the infected savagely beating them with the bat that she grasps firmly.  She drops the bat as she grasps Jacobs hand and leads him away; they catch up with the rest of the group who are hiding in a nearby car park.

As they can hear the infected closing in around them the group begin to realise that they will not be able to escape this without sacrificing one of their own. The first survivor states that the oldest should sacrifice themselves and states that one of the older survivors should just be left here as bate. An argument breaks out between the group the noise from the argument begins to attract more and more of the infected. Throughout the argument Charlie stays deadly quiet as Jacob begins to attempt to defuse the situation but it is too late.

The infected zombies begin to mass around the group of survivors, they soon are overwhelmed. Charlie shouts and begins to lead the zombies away. Puzzled Jacob asks her what are you doing, He soon clocks on to what she is doing as his face drops and she tells him to run.

She is soon overwhelmed and the savage infected zombies begin to eat Charlie. Everything goes quiet as she is slowly eaten alive as watches Jacob and the others escape she closes her eyes and everything goes black.

Post 9 - film development

Post 8 - Film language

Mise-en-scene, camera, editing and sound are all extremely important in film making.

Sound
Sound is hugely important in film making, it can turn something fairly bland into a masterpiece. Sound fills in the quiet gaps and makes the whole film/short film more engaging.

Camera
Getting the right shots is crucial in all forms of film making

Mise-en-scene
A key element of mise-en-scene is props. Props need to relate to the genre of film for it to be more realistic.

Editing
Films have to be edited in the right ways in order for them to be complete. It can turn a totally uninteresting and boring sequence of images into a different sceptical.

Post 7d - Focus group

Upon agreeing on the treatment we explained our ideas to our focus group. We read them our treatment and we waited for their feedback as we wanted to take whatever they gave us and put it on board. The whole group all enjoyed the idea and thought that it would be an idea that definitely appeals to them. There were however a few views of concern from some of them, most notably the point that it will be particularly time consuming to successfully dress the 'zombies' and to do their make-up, and at the same time make them realistic. We need plenty of time to get all of the zombies right the way we want them, if we rush this process then the whole project will look very cheap.

Post 7b - genre and conventions

Post 7c - Chosen Genre

We have decided to create a horror/comedy zombie spin-off short film, reasons being because we all have an interest in zombie films and this works to our advantage, also because we feel that it would be a good challenge to make a short film based around zombies. 

Cargo
A man stranded in the middle of the zombie apocalypse, sets out to save him and his infant daughter.

Beats

1) Man wakes up in the car and realises his wife is now a zombie.

2) He rescues his baby daughter from the back seat of the car.

3) He maps out the route to try and get him and his daughter safe.

4) The man picks up some meat.

5) He collapsed in pain but is determined to carry on.

6) He turns into a zombie.

7) Someone shoots him from a distance.

8) A group of people come over to him, the woman there spots that his daughter is still alive in his bag.

9) She rescues her.